Footsteps slowly creaked on every step of the stairs. The bedroom door handle turned slowly.
The door opened slowly SCREECH the door opened!
‘Happy birthday to you happy birthday to you happy birthday dear Jenny happy
birthday to you’ Vita happily sang to jenny with her breakfast, ‘Thank you
Vita, ‘ your welcome’ said the young couple.
Vita went to the other room to get ready while Jenny was having her breakfast.
Then after a while they both got in the car ready to go out to celebrate.
Jenny was so excited she couldn't wait to go where Vita was taking her,
‘ Just wait and see’ said Vita. They finally arrived at their location so Vita quickly covered her
‘ Just wait and see’ said Vita. They finally arrived at their location so Vita quickly covered her
eyes with a blindfold then took her to the top.
They finally got there then Jenny took the blindfold off, NOO Jenny said in fear.
‘It's gonna be okay’ said Vita, so they had a look at the rules. Next they
had to wear a wingsuit, helmet, goggles and a parachute bag. After that
they got into the plane to
had to wear a wingsuit, helmet, goggles and a parachute bag. After that
they got into the plane to
fly up to the drop zone.
They got ready to jump but first they had to wait for their leader so they know what to
Do.
A few minutes later they jumped off the plane, Jenny screamed non stop, couldn't
look down but luckily Vita was there supporting her and diving down down with her.
look down but luckily Vita was there supporting her and diving down down with her.
But as they went down the parachute couldn't work so they screamed loud with
bated breath and louder for the leader to help them.
Then the leader came down as fast as he could but the air pulled him back so he
tried his best to get down to them.
Then Vita quickly pulled every string that was there then finally got the parachute to
come out.
Then they slowly went down safely to the ground, then they all were safe
then all went to the road for a ride home.
then all went to the road for a ride home.
Well done what an awesome idiom maybe next time try and finish all 5 paragraphs Well done
ReplyDeleteWow,Omg your story was so hype it was giving me goose bumps
ReplyDeletewow i like your story but next time detail
ReplyDeletegood use of the idiom bated breath
ReplyDeletewow i like your intro but next time use more detail.
ReplyDeleteWow I really like the way you used idioms
ReplyDeleteI have achived my goal and next time i can work on adding more powerful words in my story.
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