Room 7 vs Room 8 line basketball
On monday 27 of march 2017 we were all excited to go to kiwisport then kiwisport was cancelled.
Ather that everyone knew kiwisport was cancelled then Miss morison asked us to play line basketball with their class then we went outside then miss ashley told us to be boy girl boy girl then room 8 had to be boy girl boy girl.
Then we started line basketball then when it was my turn then when i got the ball then i ran fast like flash then i shot the ball in the hoop like michael jordan.
Then on my sced turn i ran like a lion but i didn't get it in then i was sad then i tried to get the ball the room 8 people but they got a goal.
Then everyone was happy because we won 3 to 1 then we were excited.
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Total score (add the numbers next to the R’s altogether)
Good story - use more difficult words and different punctuation. Speech marks, !, ?.
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